Chapters
1, 2, and the beginnings of 3 are somewhat lacking in writing standards
and research. You have shown to the reader that you understand some
of the significance and importance of community multimedia and how
your artifact will contribute to the experience of your chosen target
group, but you've not been as clear as you should. You have some
writing, grammar and spelling errors. You have made some mistakes
in referencing and you have not used the APA style guides correctly.
Chapter 1
states the purpose and rational of using multimedia for community,
but it is lacking and somewhat confusing. You also make the common
error of beginning to discus your project and define the problem
according to the brief.
Chapter 2
is a review of the secondary literature associated with community
multimedia. You have reviewed the literature but it's not apparent
that you understand what is relevant. You are referencing everything
that you've read without realizing what is relevant. This chapter
has some writing problems and it is obvious that you don't really
understand what you've written. You have also not properly referenced
all material.
Chapter 3
has been started and the reviews of other community media may
have been included, but you've included everything, not just the
information that relates to your own project. You have begun the
process of explaining your artifact and how it fits in with the
information/purpose stated in Chapter 1 and with the review of
the secondary literature in Chapter 2, but the reader is unclear
how this relates to your artifact.
Reference page
is included but the layout and style are not completely according
to the APA manual.
Appendix
are not necessarily attached. At this point, these should include
your Concept Document and Node Map.
